Now the weakness here is in the composition. Your framing and your placememts are way off. Also she is driving a streched cube. You can do much much better than this.
So you will stop painting this and you will start drawing. To make your designs better.
1-The girl and the cabine-cockpit are almost in the middle of the car and the middle of the image. We will always or when possible, aim for the thirds. Not the middles. I would try to place the girl and cabine further to the left of the car. I would try to make her head and some part of the gun, to pop out of the silhouette of the car. So we breake the shape.
2-The gun is almost horizontal. Make it diagonal. Is she firing? Why ? To what ? She could be reloading if she has the gun lowered. It could be resting on her top crossed leg, justifying her sitting position.
3-The right part of the car is cut. I would show the whole car.
Design.... that car yo....Nope. Make it amazing. Its the biggest object. It has to be great. I would make it longer.
2-Oh and flip your image, its better if the girl is facing the right.
3-By moving her and the cockpit, look at how the shape pops out in a more interesting way ? And boom her head is framed by the fire. Focus point trickery ;)
4-Lower the scale of the fire on the left. Only the fire behind her head can be that big and intense. Focus point shape and saturation contrast remember?
5-Design that car ! Now you have space on the left. Trace your perspective lines and draw that car!
6-I lower the gun a bit, it could even be lower than that, make sure its canon comes out of the shape of the car.
7-Cable on floor going towards focus point. It should be perfectly place for that direction but a little is ok. So it guides the viewers.
Thanks for the feedback Fred, will do!
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