Week 2 Feedback Beth Sparks Thumbs 01

Week 2 Feedback Beth Sparks Thumbs 01

Hey Beth,

These are particularly interesting. I am starting to see a pattern of how you work, with this second homework. You are good with composition, your ideas are usually dynamic. That is really good. The issue here is the roughness of your sketches. If these are for you, ok thats good. But these cannot be showned to a client yet. And i would strongly advice cleaning them up, clarifying designs, shapes and values, before starting colors, painting and rendering. Because it will be tough to do it WHILE you are painting and rendering. I do this all the time too. It comes back as big trouble later on.

So here is a very quick feedback:

So let' s start with A: 

1-Great idea, very original compo, i rarely see this. Good job. Overall all are ggood actually.

2-Needs more space to the left. Because it feels a bit bunched up, and too close to the main subjects.Would be cool to see a bit more of the vehicle so dont be afraid to zoom out a bit, too show a bit more legs, left side and slightly at the top. BUT, if you decide to show all the top part of the mech, avoid having it too close to the frame, to avoid the tangent tension.

3-The pose of the pilot. Has to be cooler. I made a quick example here. She is watching the city behind here. TRy out different options see which one you like.

4-CLarify your designs ! ANd you values. Right now its way too rough to start painting.

Image B: 

1-Great job.

2-Great lines converging towards your focus points. 

3-I scaled down the pilot to improve scale contrast and make the vehicle more impressive, also it greats a better reading order. First the big vehicle, 2 the human, then third the city behind with a big toward as landmark.

4-CLarify your designs ! ANd you values. Right now its way too rough to start painting.

Image C: 

1-Cool idea again !

2-Try zooming out again. The feet are too close to the frame.

3-Decrease the tilt of the floor, to the right of the girl see ? Its way too tilted.

4-Empty area to the lower left? Needs something.

5-Try zooming out a bit and pushing your vehicle to the left. Its ok if they are not overlapping (with the pilot).

6-I wonder if bringing the vehicle closer to the pilot, and increasing its size would work.... HUm its up to you, if you want to try that out. Its not necessary so its up to you.

7-CLarify your designs ! ANd you values. Right now its way too rough to start painting.

Image D: 

1-I like this but i would push the guy ( looks like a bro ! )  to the left. Make the image full cinematic 16/9. 

2-CLarify your designs ! ANd you values. Right now its way too rough to start painting.


In general, because your comps are all dynamic they have all complex cam angles and perpective. You will have to clean them up. Start by adding your persp grid in a separate layer, and then start cleaning up your drawing. No need to be extra clean. But just clean enough that your know where you are going.